A 100-word story from a photo prompt. Thank you Rochelle for keeping us primed.
Your bare foot strikes a rock, and agony flashes through your tormented body. Far away across the sunlit field you’ve seen a big red barn. But it runs from you and then swims back. Is it real? It has to be. You fight to place each foot carefully. If you fall, you won’t get back up again. Not before the drug drags you into insanity. Somehow you know that.
I love you, he said. Another lie, you know that now, too. But you don’t want to know. You can’t let yourself believe it. Not yet.
Don’t fall, don’t. Keep going.
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Genie in a Box: Words and thoughts from Eugenia Parrish, Author 
Nice tension building. There were a lot of tense moments with this one. Good one.
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Thank you! I don’t usually do second-person present tense, but it seemed best for immediacy.
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Another captive! Maybe your MC and CathrynAnn’s occupy the same barn and don’t even know it!
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We do seem to be have been on a similar road. Thanks for reading!
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What torture to not only have to fight to get away but for the drug not to take effect!
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Yes, a double threat. I was hoping that would come through.
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I hope she finds sanctuary.
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Poor woman. You’ve captured her dilemma very well in this story.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you, Susan!
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Dear Genia,
The panic and angst in this are tangible. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you so much, Rochelle.
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Rochelle, thank you so much. I really appreciate your comments.
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We’re all sometimes guilty of believing something we want to believe and not wishing to look around the edges to the reality. Nice one!
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So true! Thanks for reading and commenting. It’s always good to know someone has read your offering 😉
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Written in the second person, not easily done. Great piece.
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I think this is the first time I’ve tried it. Thank you 😊
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Great tension created, I was willing her on.
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Tension is what I was trying for. Thank you!
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Good use of the blurred vision
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Thank you! I’m not sure where the drug idea came from, but suddenly it explained the effect, so I used it.
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You’ve used a breathless voice for this story, and it’s completely appropriate. Your character is struggling against the odds, and I very much hope she escapes!
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Thanks 😊 That’s a great thing for a writer to hear!
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I like the part where she won’t allow herself to believe he means her harm just yet. Her focus needs to be on escape. I hope she makes it!
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She’s having trouble believing that her dreams of romance were a lie. I hope so too!
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